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My love, let me hold you.
Through night and day.
My love, do not go.
I promise I will stay.

Your touch is what I crave.
I want your hand to hold.
Let us dream away this day.
Together grow old.

Your lips bring desire.
You are truly divine.
I will prove my love.
Will you please be mine?

-HeartlessTales
I wrote this poem last night while reading a book. I tried to portray the feeling of love by writing a ballad. Ballads are commonly used to tell stories but, I decided to put a modern twist on it and tell no story at all. I hope all who read this find it interesting or likable to some extent.
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chainedheart977 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013
I love this one, (mmmh, could that be a pun I'm writing?) It's easier to read and understand than the "Our Love" poem because it has (,) that, I can't spell it correctly nor a lot of thing today. Anyway I like this one a lot more and it can apply to more people when it doesn't tell a story.
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HeartlessTales Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for your comments! :) I really enjoy reading your responses, I will definitely join your group!
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chainedheart977 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013
Thank You. :D
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fuzzballfern Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013   General Artist
I thought the full stops at the end of every line might make it a bit stop-starty at first but it works really well :) I like it
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HeartlessTales Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah I was a bit concerned about that while writing it but, thank you for your comment! :) I like the way you look at literature.
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fuzzballfern Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013   General Artist
no problem, and thanks :)
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ShadAlex1011 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
So beautiful I love it!!! <3
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HeartlessTales Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! It was my first ever attempt at a balled, let alone a serious love poem, I'm glad you like it! :)
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ShadAlex1011 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I didn't like it, I loved it!!!! <3 :iconadorableplz:
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HeartlessTales Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Awwwww :blush: that made my day! Thank you! :heart:
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